Why is she in England?
15 pounds for half an hour. What mugs are paying that much. Back to the normal space. As I drive round to the normal space I begin to scroll through the convosations I had with my Mum. All I can really remember is that she said this girl was some sort of rebel and to make shore that I call her bye some nick name only problem is I can’t remember it.
October 15, 2014 at 6:00 pm
Arthur,
I like your opening sentences, they give a clear sense of frustration. The ends g has lots of potential for development.
Targets:
– be careful with homophones – shore vs sure
– vary your vocabulary to avoid repetition, look at the phrase ‘normal space’
– did you write a plan?