My lovely wife. I have news that will bring great news to you. The battle was long and brutal many of my comrades lay down there lives but we were able to rise up and crush are enemy. It was my hand that cut down Mcdonald with my own hands. You my love, will be surprised to learn that this is not the most dazzling thing to happen to me today. The stars must have been shining on me that day because not only did the battle go well, I also ran in with the most amazing creatures. If they human or not I still do not know but what I do know is that they could do some startling things. You remember me saying that I killed Mcdonald well this has lead me to be given the tittle of Thane of Corrode. But my love this fact was not mown to these strange things yet they were able to tell me such. This however is only a taster of what happened. They also told me a great thing. That I would be king. My love I am so confused it is news that I so very wish could be true but I don’t see how it could be. This is news that I think would become clear if I were to have your judgment. I look forward to seeing you soon.
March 27, 2014 at 9:49 pm
Hello,
You show a clear understanding of character and events. I like that you have also tried to include some of Shakespeare’s imagery.
Targets:
– Remember to use paragraphs;
– always re-read and edit your spelling – be careful with homophones.
April 23, 2014 at 7:07 am
I am really impressed by the language you used in this letter, referring to imagery that we have studied. I particularly like that you didn’t refer to the witches as witches but creatures; this among other language choices has created a very convincing tone. I think my favourite part is where you say that you need Lady Macbeth’s ‘judgement’; it is in keeping with the tone but gives that deeper insight into their relationship.
Targets: as mentioned by Mr North – focusing on these will add clarity to your writing.